The Story and Drawings from your mind.
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Here, if you have a story you have written, or a picture you have drawn and you want to see how it would do in the real life of critizism, then you can post it here. Our members will critic your work and help you with ideas that you need help with. Enjoy!


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Post  Gage Sun Apr 17, 2011 11:41 pm

So tell me what you think about it? Please i want feedback.

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Post  Danielle Mon Apr 18, 2011 12:00 am

You had a good flow of how the stanzas went together, it made the poem fit with the feeling you had it foresee. I have a question though; Where did you get the idea to write this type of poem?

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Post  Gage Mon Apr 18, 2011 12:04 am

I didn't kill anyone don't worry. But someone,but my best friend had betrayed me. In the moment of sadness i wrote this.

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Post  Evelyn Mon Apr 18, 2011 12:15 am

Ok, I know nothing about songs and poems- But I've listened to many and that was amzing.
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